Short Summary via Amazon: “Kahlen is a Siren, bound to serve the Ocean by luring humans to watery graves with her voice, which is deadly to any human who hears it. Akinli is human—a kind, handsome boy who’s everything Kahlen ever dreamed of. Falling in love puts them both in danger . . . but Kahlen can’t bear to stay away. Will she risk everything to follow her heart?”
My Review: I was suckedinto this spellbinding story from the first page, but expected so much more from this story than I got.
Captured by the plot of this story, I fell in love with the sisterhood the sirens share, and Kahlen, the protagonist, as well as the Ocean herself. I don’t care much for the side character, Akinli, as a character on his own, but appreciate the conflict he creates for the main character.
I definitely wanted more from the shipwrecked scenes. More detail, horror, sensory. Sensory details that would have made me sympathize with Kahlen and the other sirens, or side with the Ocean. I wanted to feel her emotions more–not just the teenage romance, but her love and hate of the Ocean herself.
This book has a lot of potential, but there were so many questions I had left about the sirens and ocean history. Instead of the mopy romance, I wanted more from the fantasy, magical side of the story.
That being said, it was a sweet, fast paced read. Definitely got me in a magical mermaid mood while I was lounging at the beach. My copy of this book is full of salt water and sand.
My writing goal for June 2017 was 50k for my zombie fantasy story.
I’m excited to announce:
DRAFT 1 is COMPLETE!! FINALLY!!
I’m taking a break this month to work on a new WIP for CampNaNoWriMo,
but look forward to diving back into revisions in August!
Thanks for all your encouragement! I couldn’t have done it without you! ♥
Secrets threaten, but magic kills. All Sarn wanted was to get to work on time, do his job and go home to his secret son. Instead, he’s kidnapped by an enchanted tree and embroiled in a mystery so bizarre, it causes him to question everything he’s ever believed in.
This is a hard review to write because I’m unsure if I will be finishing this book. It has the potential to be a great story, and I really do like the author’s writing in some places, but there are a few areas I think need some heavy revisions and editing. There are a lot of paragraphs that are redundant and repetitive. There’s also a lot of story-telling going on, instead of showing, which for me is sometimes long-winded and unnecessary. I’m more and more aware of the need for these edits as I read a variety of authors’ books, as well as while I’m revising my own.
Example: instead of a telling us that a character walked in and surprised everyone in the room, have another character show their shock by speaking up. Instead of a character stopping to allow people to pass, have the character extend their arm and say, “no, you first.” These are just minor examples, but hopefully you get my point. There are a lot of these little moments in just about every chapter, where Sarn could think or talk out-loud to himself, or the characters could be conversing instead of just acting it out.
After reading the sample, I’m torn between shelving this one or continuing, especially since realizing there are over 100 chapters in the actual book. The book does have some positive reviews though. I might have to come back to it when I have more time to spend in this world. For now, I’m shelving it as an unfinished book, which could use some revisions.