My Rating: 3/5 Stars
Secrets threaten, but magic kills. All Sarn wanted was to get to work on time, do his job and go home to his secret son. Instead, he’s kidnapped by an enchanted tree and embroiled in a mystery so bizarre, it causes him to question everything he’s ever believed in.
This is a hard review to write because I’m unsure if I will be finishing this book. It has the potential to be a great story, and I really do like the author’s writing in some places, but there are a few areas I think need some heavy revisions and editing. There are a lot of paragraphs that are redundant and repetitive. There’s also a lot of story-telling going on, instead of showing, which for me is sometimes long-winded and unnecessary. I’m more and more aware of the need for these edits as I read a variety of authors’ books, as well as while I’m revising my own.
Example: instead of a telling us that a character walked in and surprised everyone in the room, have another character show their shock by speaking up. Instead of a character stopping to allow people to pass, have the character extend their arm and say, “no, you first.” These are just minor examples, but hopefully you get my point. There are a lot of these little moments in just about every chapter, where Sarn could think or talk out-loud to himself, or the characters could be conversing instead of just acting it out.
After reading the sample, I’m torn between shelving this one or continuing, especially since realizing there are over 100 chapters in the actual book. The book does have some positive reviews though. I might have to come back to it when I have more time to spend in this world. For now, I’m shelving it as an unfinished book, which could use some revisions.